Argumentative Essay : Junk Food #Draft 1
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Junk food is being blamed for causes many undesirable problems to children. It is referred to any food that is low nutritional value such as instant noodles, potato chips and chocolate bars. Takeaway foods, pre-packaging meals and sugary snack food are also included as junk food (Lin 2005). In response to the problem, I strongly believe that the sale of junk food should be banned.
The first reason why junk food should be banned is because it causes behavioral problems in children. Most of them contain chemical additives to enhance flavor and colour and to increase shelf life. Furthermore, junk food has a lot of flavor as it is typically high in fat, salt, or sugar and commonly containing synthetic flavor enhancer. These additives have been shown to cause the behavioral problems such as hyperactivity and pour concentration. Based on a research, it is proven that junk foods are often loaded with chemical additives which can trigger behavioral problems (Mary 2005).
Secondly, junk food is to be said as the major contributor to litter problems. The fast food packaging causes litter problems which is a safety and health hazard, increases cleaning costs and reflects bad image to our communities (Jemma 2005). Cans, crisp packets, cartons and plastic container are among of them and are everywhere (Jack 2005). By reducing the sale of junk foods, litter problem in schools can be redressed (Jemma 2005) as many junk foods are sold in school canteen. As the result of the reduction, the school grounds man doesn’t have to spend so long cleaning and has more time to spend on maintenance projects that benefit the school (Jack 2005).
Lastly, junk foods need to be banned because they are unhealthy diet because they are lack in nutritional value. The nutritional value of food eaten by Australian children has been falling progressively over the past 30 years and this can be linked directly to the increased availability and consumption of junk food (Lin 2005). Examples of the junk food that is low in nutritional value are biscuits, cookies, chips, confectionery, hamburgers, instant noodles and soft drinks (Health Foundation 2005). These unhealthy diets can cause further problems to children that are contributing to youth weight gain and childhood obesity (Lin 2005).
As a conclusion, the consumption of junk foods by children has many side effects and has to be reduced. These unhealthy diets causes’ health and behavioral problems to children as well as causes litter problems to community. The blame is frequently directed at junk food. Therefore, the sale of junk food should be banned.
The first reason why junk food should be banned is because it causes behavioral problems in children. Most of them contain chemical additives to enhance flavor and colour and to increase shelf life. Furthermore, junk food has a lot of flavor as it is typically high in fat, salt, or sugar and commonly containing synthetic flavor enhancer. These additives have been shown to cause the behavioral problems such as hyperactivity and pour concentration. Based on a research, it is proven that junk foods are often loaded with chemical additives which can trigger behavioral problems (Mary 2005).
Secondly, junk food is to be said as the major contributor to litter problems. The fast food packaging causes litter problems which is a safety and health hazard, increases cleaning costs and reflects bad image to our communities (Jemma 2005). Cans, crisp packets, cartons and plastic container are among of them and are everywhere (Jack 2005). By reducing the sale of junk foods, litter problem in schools can be redressed (Jemma 2005) as many junk foods are sold in school canteen. As the result of the reduction, the school grounds man doesn’t have to spend so long cleaning and has more time to spend on maintenance projects that benefit the school (Jack 2005).
Lastly, junk foods need to be banned because they are unhealthy diet because they are lack in nutritional value. The nutritional value of food eaten by Australian children has been falling progressively over the past 30 years and this can be linked directly to the increased availability and consumption of junk food (Lin 2005). Examples of the junk food that is low in nutritional value are biscuits, cookies, chips, confectionery, hamburgers, instant noodles and soft drinks (Health Foundation 2005). These unhealthy diets can cause further problems to children that are contributing to youth weight gain and childhood obesity (Lin 2005).
As a conclusion, the consumption of junk foods by children has many side effects and has to be reduced. These unhealthy diets causes’ health and behavioral problems to children as well as causes litter problems to community. The blame is frequently directed at junk food. Therefore, the sale of junk food should be banned.
1 comments:
well, i'll try my best to help you. in my opinion, your introduction is quite short. i think you should link the topic properly with the thesis statement. i cant understand what you tried to explain in your introduction part. i think you can explain more so that your introduction part can be improved. i think you have stated the case clearly as you have said that you agree the sale of junk food should be banned. for you body part, i think the topic is well expanded. however, you didnt cite some of the information. citation is compulsory as the information is not yours. and some of your citation stated is incorrect. i am sure u know what i mean as we have discussed it before. in my opinion, u have synthesized the information well as you didnt copy the information directly from the text. you have stated all the main points which i think is already good. you have clearly stated the main point clearly for each paragraph. emm, i think you didnt insert information from all texts given by miss dil. you should insert information from all texts as many as u can so that u can get extra points, maybe. emm,i think your conclusion part is too short. explain more so that your conclusion will be more interesting. im not good in grammar. i'll try to correct your mistakes. for introduction part, it should be "Junk food is being blamed for causing many undesirable problems". then, for the first body paragraph,"pour" should be "poor". for the second body paragraph, it should be " as a result" not "as the result". for the third body paragraph, i cant understand your last sentence. i think your essay is nice but some improvement can be done so that it can be more interesting. by the way, thanks for commented my essay. lets together make the changes....=)
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